Idk How To Title This But Help xD

[iMeisaki]

Uhm... Hello there!


I am Meisaki and I need help.


I'm trying to write a story/book.. Whatever you may call it ^^ But I'm going to use the characters that I have made on here.


However, nobody has criticized any of my characters except the very first one. I really need help on having my characters criticized so I can go forward in writing my story/whatever xD


I didn't really want to post it in character thread because that's where you post characters. I also didn't want to post it in the help section because that's mainly used for help around the site and not really characters. So I posted it here because it seemed to fit it. I need help in planning my story so I need criticism for my characters :-)


Thank you. PM me or comment on my character dump about the criticism.


Modern - Characters and Such. New Character: John Hyeon | RpNation.com - Best Roleplay Forum This is the character dump.

 

[Lexielai]

OMG I got busy and totally forgot. Sorry X.X

 

[iMeisaki]

@Lexielai


Haha it's alright. I actually had forgotten


 
I still need help if anyone can though

 

[Bacon is fluffy]

I'll need a lot of time to read through and carefully give feedback, but right off the back your first guy's description(Sam) leaves a lot to be desired. The main thing is when you call him he typical Korean man, what is a typical Korean man? If he's from North Korea, what is he like?


Don't assume I know these things, part of your job as a writer is to communicate important things like this.


But I liked the eyes part. I'm not an expert with structure, but it was very well put. It just seemed kind of off because of the way you punctuated it.

 

[iMeisaki]

@Bacon is fluffy


Thank you for helping me with my first character. I basically do that to all of my character saying they are either a typical Korean man/woman. I'll put in more detail in what a typical Korean man/woman is.


Since it was my first character, I screwed up a lot of my structure in that character. Glad you liked the eyes though ^^ I love details.