Harlow Maddison

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Pokemon - Worlds Unfurled


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Character Name:


Harlow Maddison



Character Age:

17



Character Race:

Human



Character Gender:

Female



Character Occupation:

Pokemon Trainer



Birthplace:

Pallet Town


Current Location/Residence:


Pallet Town


Height:


5'7"

Weight:

115 lbs.


Blood Type:


B+


Body Type:


Mesomorph


Voice Type:


Mezzo-Sopranao

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Starter Pokémon: Froakie [sticky]


Current Pokémon Party: Froakie [sticky], Litwick [Ghost].


Description:


Harlow is a fairly skinny girl with dark brown, almost black, eyes. She has big lips and has poor eye sight, so she wears glasses, often concealing her big eyes, and she hates it. Harlow tends to dress casually, in jeans and t-shirts, and is only ever seen wearing one piece of jewelry - a woven bracelet from her mother. She loves short hair and only wears it short, and never lets anyone cut her hair straight. She likes wild cuts, and bangs. She tends to wear sneakers or flats. Comfort is her main priority, but even if she doesn't try hard, she has good fashion sense.


As if having glasses didn't make her feel silly, she also grew into the personality of a girl with glasses - a nerd. She is actually very intelligent and quite good with numbers and technology, she just has a natural nack for that sort of thing. Jonas used to joke about her father, and whenever there was a problem with the computer or the tv, their father would just walk into the room and the problem would disappear. Harlow loves the fact that she has the same sort of talent and is good at the same thing, it makes her feel as if she still has a piece of him.




Personality:

Harlow is a really bouncy, happy and fun girl, who enjoys cracking jokes and loves to see others laugh. Harlow's all about having a good time, but can be lazy if you let her, and she loves to sleep. Harlow has a strong love for Pokemon and at times may chase after a wild one and end up with a few scratches. All of her family enjoy the company of Pokemon, so why not she? Although Harlow can be kind and happy, she doesn't enjoy following rules and kind sometimes be rather rebellious. Harlow doesn't mind getting dirty and loves to play around, but as hard as she tries, she can be very ill mannered. Although she may be rebellious, she doesn't enjoy thinking that other people look at her and think 'a slob' or 'an inconsiderate girl' and she does try her best to have good manners but growing up in a household with four brothers and no parents doesn't exactly teach you respect.

Harlow loves cuddling and all things cute, but she's nowhere near a girly girl. She snores, and she can play rather rough at times. She is never afraid to speak up for herself and though at times she can get a little worried about what others think of her. Harlow, as stated before, has a knack for technology and tries really hard to show it off, because she feels like something needs to be shown off other then her loud voice and bounciness. She loves to eat, and is almost always found with one piece of food in her pocket (nearly always candy) and has a large sweet tooth.

Overall, Harlow can be very fun to hang out with but many times doesn't think before she speaks.




Strengths:
Harlow is very confident and not afraid to be herself, and also is not afraid to stand up to others or fight for what she believes in. She's very bubbly and happy and is excellent at making others smile, and is very good with technology and numbers. Aka being smart.




Weaknesses:
She often does not think before she speaks, leading to some peculiar situations, and sometimes acts as if she was raised in a pig sty. She can also be very, very loud. Harlow is also rather gullible and can get paranoid easily.




Biography:


Harlow never met her parents. They left on a business trip when she was barely a few days old and never came back. She was the youngest of four brothers, and this is how she came to be very ill-mannered and loud. Growing up with four brothers, she had to fight for almost everything, especially privacy. The eldest of her brothers, Jonas, who was nearly 18 when she was born, always nurtured and cared for her like a father, and she is very close to him. Thomas, Rory, and Kevin are absolutely brothers to her. She hates them and loves them with a passion. Harlow was never taught manners, living with four boys, and as she grew, she tried her hardest to learn, but it was so hard for her. She always fidgeted, and never understood why you needed to stand up straight (didn't she look the same either way?) and thought her voice was never loud. Thus, she never really got the hang of it. And without a proper mother and father, she was always doing stupid things and getting into trouble. Harlow dislikes rules and people that think they can tell her what to do, and she often found fun in breaking rules set for her, running off into the forest because of a Pokemon she had been chasing and came back with multiple scrapes and scratches, occasionally needing stitches and casts. She wasn't afraid to climb that tree to get to that Starly's nest. Ouch.

Harlow's never thought much of her parents. She never even knew what it was like to have them, so it was hard to mourn them. "What'd they look like? How'd the act?" She would ask Jonas, and try to imagine them in her mind but it was really hard. Sometimes she wonders if they really did die, or maybe they just got lost. She has family, it's not like she's an orphan, so it was always complicated for her to understand what had happened with them, who they were, who they would've been if they were in her life.

Because of her love for Pokemon, Harlow was always playing with her brothers's Pokemon. Sometimes they even got angry with her because their Pokemon actually enjoyed her company better. Thomas once caught a Sylveon, hearing it was rare, and Harlow was so intrigued and entranced with this cute little fluffy Pokemon that she actually stole the pokeball and played with it at night, until Jonas caught her one evening and grounded her for a week. On the day that she was permitted to get her very own Pokemon, she practically flew out of her bed and literally ran to the lab. Her parents had worked with the lab, or more like volunteered, and had disappeared when going off on a journey to collect research on Pokemon and their habitats. Otherwise, they both worked at a local Pokemart. And because of this she was allowed a choice of pokemon. She immediately went for Froakie, as she absolutely loved it's fluffy, cloud like mane. And upon hearing it's mane was called Frubbles, she loved it even more, because anytime anyone would say such a word she would laugh her head off. She once got her hand stuck in it's mane, thus the name Sticky. Sticky is incredibly proud and loyal, but rather wary of others and only trusts Harlow.

Now Harlow is on her own Pokemon adventure. Who knows what will happen next?


Family









  • Name: Jonas Maddison
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    Sex: Male


    Height: 5'11"


    Date of birth: January 13th, 1979 (35 years old)


    Birthplace: Kanto, Pallet Town


    Current Location: Celadon City


    Occupation: Husband, Pokemon trainer, Pokemart worker.


    Badges: x4


    Pokemon Party:

    • Empoleon [Tsunami]
    • Toxicroak [Toxic]
    • Mamoswine [Crash]
    • Mandibuzz
    • Diggersby [Digger]


    Personality:


    Jonas is a lighthearted, happy, caring, and kind guy. He is very passionate about Pokemon and he has very strong bonds with all of his own. His wife, Florence, isn't a Pokemon trainer but a Pokemon groomer. She has only one Pokemon, which is a Furfrou. Jonas works at a local Pokemart but he truly wants to do something with Pokemon, let it be a gym leader, a teacher, anything. He is the most alike to our friend Harlow, and they both are not really about strategy, but the passion and love put into the battle. Jonas and Florence live happily in Celadon City and are trying for a child.




Current Team







  • Nickname - Sticky
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    Species - Froakie


    Nature - Brave


    Known Moves - Pound, Bubble, Water Pulse, Tackle.


    Sticky is a very proud, brave, and bold little frog Pokemon. He loves Harlow and she is really the only person he trusts, he's very wary of all other Pokemon and people and will do whatever it takes to protect Harlow. Sometimes Sticky can get annoyed with his trainer, though, and can be aggravated by her naive personality. Sticky can be rather impatient at times but in battle he's got all the time in the world.


 
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Description


I really liked the bits of information you put up in the beginning, the body type and the voice type doing a good job with building the character up from the ground and giving her a good piece of frame for you to fill out. Short and sweet, the description accurately portrayed who you had planned on making for the Personality and Backstory, and the only thing I noticed that was in someway improvable was that you defined her as a Nerd, because of her growing into how she thought she would become with the glasses. Now, I can understand. Since she has an interest in technology on a rather high level, that she would instantly be a nerd, and I'm not saying thats incorrect. However, to reference the other sections, you put very few bits or pieces that helped the "Nerd" idea that was present in the Description, making it seem as a rather obtuse corner in an otherwise rounded out character.


Personality


Other than the very few references to Harlow being a "Nerd", the Personality was very well done and I had very few problems with it. Descriptive, yet not in a rambling sort of way, the little paragraph has a nice flow and still manages to be descriptive a point where I feel as if I know this character. One of the favorite this Personality, was that it fit. My favorite thing about Personalities, is when they work together in harmony with the Biography. I've read Harlow's Biography, and from my standpoint, nothing seemed to out of the way. Now, I will say that the way Harlow felt about her dead parents could have been handled differently, maybe a bit more friction, but otherwise, I still loved it and I think you did an awesome job.


Biography


The first thing I notice is a strong start. No rambling, no useless reiterating, all of it was stated in a way that was flowing, entertaining, and most importantly, informative. Going on, I can see how you placed Harlow as a ill-mannered girl because of her lack of parents and always having to fight for what she wanted with her brothers. I can see this happening, but I would think that there would have to be something else, maybe a rebellious streak that she already had. Nonetheless, I really liked how you made her relationship with her brothers, and I really think you were able to capture just how a family acts in this kind of situation. I also liked the idea of the ending. It had a real homey kind of feel to it with the adventurous girl staying home and having tiny adventures with her new pokemon.


Overall


I think you did a really good job with this one. Very to the point, decisive with word use, and otherwise enjoyable. I will say that I found that there was a lack of 'friction' in her story though. Not to say that its needed, but when I read your Character Sheet, I don't really feel a connection. She is definitely a fleshed out character, and she has her quirks that get her into trouble, but she has no real goals or inner conflicts as to what she will be doing. She is adventurous, but she is also loyal to her family and loves them very much. Her brothers didn't go off on a trip, or I can only assume they didn't, but does that mean that she won't at some point? Has she ever felt caged by the bonds with her family? I am not saying that any of this is a thing that should be a part of her character, because that is up to you. I am just asking these questions to show you what I mean when I bring up her lack of friction. I've read many of your character sheets, and I've always really enjoyed them Cloudy, so I hope you continue with what you do, and I wish you the best of luck.
 
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Thank you very much for this wonderful descriptive review you've written for me. I really now know what could be fixed and added, etc. I think the actual form has more too it as well but I only copied from the Character Recovery. This is also a couple months old, and I think I've improved a lot since then, so if I were to revise this sheet now (which I probably will do) it'll be much cleaner. Now I do much bigger paragraphs lol xD But thank you so much, and I shall get to work!
 
I will discuss the two biggest things I see that you have improved quite well. Let me just say that I was amazed at the amount of effort put into the improvements, and I commend you for that!


Biography


The biggest thing I see is that you have done very well in adding a certain quality of detail into the past of your character. While the previous version was entertaining and informative, this new version is amazing in that it really goes over what I thought was lacking. You described Harlow's personality underway into the History and I could really see that connection between the two, not to mention of the little addition I saw in her personality weaknesses that I enjoy. I think you did a very good job with improving upon the things I thought could use some touching up on, and it really came out as an awesome background.


Family


This was a part that I was not expecting, or at least not in this gratuitous fashion. I love the multiple tabs full of information, and you really made each brother a significant person, not just an extra. Each one having a history that you can reference while using your character, and each one having a similar impact on Harlow. The only thing I could say to add to this amazing addition would be there relationship with Harlow, but I will also say that its absence allows you to interchange them when needed, so it would be perfectly fine to not actually type that out.


Overall


I saw a number of really cool touch ups here and there, some in the personality sections, and I think the appearance, and overall, I think you just did a grand old job with this one. I really enjoyed this one, and I had a fun time reading over everything and seeing all the tiny little things that were different from the previous version.
 
10/10 "Needs more of my magics" -Dry


I give my review a 3/10. It's quirky,but too short.
 

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