Fandom Fullmetal Alchemist: The Abyss OOC

[Kobe Nathan Wade]

Aight motherfuckers. Ask me questions and start discussing your characters, how they interact with each other. I'd ideally like a couple of yours to have a history together, or not. Up to you. As far as mine, the captain and the fuhrur (And of course random NPCs) your characters will all have approximate knowledge of their personality's and maybe some rumors about their past. You guys, should you choose not to be best friends amongst yourselves, will also have approximate knowledge of each other. The captain and the fuhrur, however, will know almost everything there is to know about you. Because they read your file. NOW that is not saying your character can't have nefarious purposes for being a state alchemist that they don't know about, experiences, sexual orientations. You'll have been a state alchemist for a while though, so assume they're familiar with you.

 

[firestorm]

Hi i wanted to ask, I posted a charter thats a chimara wolf. Can i keep him as a pet.

 

[Kobe Nathan Wade]

NAHHHH son. I'm going to be honest with you that character sheet was BARELY readable. Now, I don't want to turn you away from the rp in general. This is a chance for growth. You have two options, I will help you improve your writing and we can work on your sheet together, or second choice don't join this rp.

Secondary: A chimera can't be an alchemist. As you can see from the anime, a person fused with a chimera can barely be considered conscious. Secondary, I would accept him being a pet to another alchemist, but that's kinda fucked up to keep what was once a person as a pet unless that's for some BDSM shit, and the state alchemists would probably not allow that unless you argued it was for the sake of training him to see if he could be brought back to a rational state of mind.

 

[firestorm]

Sure I would aprechate the help as for him being a chimara thats fine if he remains a pet. Also it was not for the reason for bdsm, I just dont like to have a human so for the second reason as training him to be more logical then yes thats the way I want to go.

 

[Kobe Nathan Wade]

Okie dokie, good that you'd like to improve your skills. So I can only accept humans as members of the state alchemists as those are the only people in the fullmetal alchemist universe who can perform alchemy. However, I suppose a humunculous could join the military. Or maybe a chimera like the one's who worked with greed whom were just very small parts animals, but those were mostly made by the military and let's just assume that character isn't one because of the tragic backstory you gave him. BUT let's focus on this wolf character first, since you like him best. I want you to rewrite his character sheet. We'll look at it bit by bit.

"Name: osamaru blood knight" So the first name is fine, that can be whatever I suppose. The last name though is very unrealistic in this roleplay because the country that the state alchemists operate in is highly based off of industrial Germany (Minus the nazi's. Keep the genocide.) So his last name might be something like Muller or Schmidt. I'll still give you artistic freedom there so mayber your country is from another country far off that is more based of japan. I'd be cool with that. Something that will make you a better writer is instead of picking something that "sounds cool." Like blood knight, pick something that works with the story.

"Title: the hell hound Alchemist" Cool name. Possibly the name for the alchemist who keeps him as a pet. Maybe that's a guy who specializes in creating wolf-based chimera and controlling and training them. However chimera can't perform alchemy, so Osamaru can't be an alchemist.

"Physicality: osamaru is a wolf chimira. He stands 5,5 next to a human. He has black fur and blue eyes. He is always scene with the Fuhrur on a leash becase of his statas as a chimara. His collor holds a transmution circle on it." The collar was a nice touch if he could actually perform alchemy. Let's just focus on expanding his description and improving your writing ability. You covered the basics. Height, weight, hair color. Let's expand on those a bit. And spelling. Scene is spelled seen when talking about eyesight. Scene is like a scene in a movie. Is english your first language? Don't be embarrassed if it's not. Plenty of people can learn to write well and everyone has to start somewhere. Fucking hell if Hellan Keller can do it so can we. A good thing to do is google words you don't know. You'll get proper spelling and definitions in like .5 so it's worth the effort. Collor is collar. I won't go through and point out every spelling mistake because even I do that shit all the time. Just check yourself and educate yourself if you don't know. Back to the description itself.

Talk more about how your character walks. His posture, his stride. What is his mood like? Does he smile a lot? Does he give other people the creeps by staring at them like dogs do? Is his hair matted and blotchy? What bits of him look more wolf like as opposed to human like? Is he muscular? From what? Look at a power lifter and a sprinter. Both are strong and muscular but built completely different ways. Really imagine your character in your head and describe him head to toe. I'll stop there and wait to see what you come up with. firestorm

 

[firestorm]

How is this

Name: Osamaru



Rank:pet


Physicality: Osamaru is a wolf chimera mix. He stands 5,5 next to a human. He has black fur and blue eyes. At first glance he looks scary with a dripping maw and large fangs that stick out over his lips. His body is skinny and lean and his fur is sleek and long. He growls at most anything accept his trainer lance. His teeth are always glimmering in the sun. He is scared of the Fuhrer though and will cower in front of him. He usually stands rigged at anyone else approaches him. Osamaru does not look like a human except his blue eyes and his paws are the color of a humans hands



Background: Osamaru grew up out of central with his brother lance. When lance became sick with yellow fever, Osamaru went to find help. Osamaru met a man named Stone who agreed to help him in return for him to help him complete a project. Stone saved lance and osamaru went to help Stone as it was his deal. When osamaru met up with stone. Stone had tricked him and transmuted him into a wolf chimera. Osamaru passed out waking up as a wolf and not human. When the Fuhrer found him it was too late to reverse the damage. So he was brought to central command and registered as a chimera. Osamaru lost his humanity and is now in training to see if he could be brought back.

 

[Kobe Nathan Wade]

firestorm BRUH THAT"S SO MUCH BETTER. You were just being lazy the first time, weren't you? Go ahead and rewrite his abilities and I'll accept him. (ANd then I'm assuming you're going to write lance as well?)

 

[firestorm]

Yes

 

[Ribbit]

Question ! Is this before the events of the anime or after ? Since I plan on making my character related to Roy as his apprentice or something of the sort.

 

[Kobe Nathan Wade]

Ribbit WAY after. Roy could have been like, his grandfather but would have retired from the military 20+ plus years ago. A couple of the anime characters will show up later so I'm kind of hesitant to allow that. Go ahead and write the sheet and if it's an interesting and engaging character that's well thought out I'll allow it and then if Roy shows up your character can have a preconceived relationship with him.

 

[Ribbit]

aight thx