Florence Fannel

[NotAllThatCreative]

Florence Fannel

Basics

Name: Florence Fannel


Age: 250


Gender: Female


Sexual Orientation: Straight

• Appearance
• Personality
• History
• Skills

• Appearance
  
  Height: 5'8"
  
  
  Weight: 130 lbs
  
  
  Hair: Long thin white hair that goes to her lower back. It's either braided or curled, sometimes left untouched as well.
  
  
  Eyes: Light hazel
  
  
  Body: Skinny
  
  
  Attire: Likes to wear her father's shirts when she can and isn't bothered by the fact that they're big on her. She wears a variety of things but it's all mostly simple dresses that she can wear to school and jeans with simple shirts, she mostly wears the dresses.
  
  
  Long fingers and her nails act as claws since they're very long. Her legs are long too, this being from the fact that her mother can stand at 7' on her tip toes.
  
  
  
• Personality
  
  She has the patience of a saint and is never really angered. Despite how she never had any siblings, she does love children and is very curious about them, often following her father to work to see what it's like to work with disabled children. A smart young girl and often keeps her thoughts to herself, not liking the idea of burdening anyone with them. Doesn't have many friends and often keeps to herself, either reading a book or writing something. She does get embarrassed very easily and fidgets when that happens, not really saying anything. Likes traveling and seeing the more historical places of the world. Is very awkward around new people, not children, and often tries to avoid large social situations like dances and other such situations. She is very curious about her mother's family but never brings it up and asks Anya (her doctor) despite how the woman knows next to nothing about her mother. Very close to Molly (her cousin) and is at Nicholas' (her other cousin, Molly's father) house when she's bored or no one's around for her to talk with. She likes antiques and her room is full of them, Anya mostly gets them for her. Loves to help out when she can but often pouts when she's forced to run errands for one of her parents and she does it without question, just pouting while she does it. Doesn't like her mother's constant worrying about her but she doesn't say a word about it and just lets her father handle it, knowing he's better at calming her mother down than she is. She is a playful creature and does love to have fun but, like her father, she's a very proper young girl and waits for someone to bring the idea up rather than say it aloud.
  
  
  
• History
  
  Florence was born in London, England, and to two very loving parents. But there was one problem... Her mother was very old fashioned and a half dragon (so that makes Florence 25% dragon). The woman kept her daughter in so much during her life, that the girl has bad social skills at certain times. This rough and ridiculous childhood was also filled with very few friends, many doctor visits that were caused by her mother's worries and because of osteoarthritis in her knees, and rarely ever going outside. She is often teased in school about various thing, being abnormal the main thing the kids like to tease her about, and she ignored them most of the time despite how their words hurt.
  
  
  
• Skills
  
  She has the advanced sight, hearing, and smell of a dragon. She can pick up on things that could be a good two miles away from her. Her hearing, well. She could pick up on heartbeats even if the person is across the room. Smell, she can be like a dog in this aspect. She can pick up scents all kinds. She just doesn't like the pollution in the air, it makes her nose hurt. If she adds enough force, she could easily knock a human out in one punch. She does have a lot of strength within her but that can be explained later. She can run longer than a human and can go a few days without eating.
  
  
  

 

[DamagedGlasses]

Personality


While I read your Personality, the biggest thing I felt could be improved upon is how you seemed to go a bit overboard with positives. I've always thought that a character needs balance, and I think that with a bit more, you could have a much more enjoyable character. When I was reading, and looking for negative sides, I had to go back and reread a few times to find them. I wouldn't put so much emphasis on character negatives, however, when you take a look at your History, you can see that your character had a time with loneliness and social anxiety, however, this does not seem to bleed over and blend in with what you have her current Personality as. While you have given her social dilemmas, not liking crowds, nervous around new people, I believe that you could do a whole lot more with this character. Does she have any resentment towards her mother? Does she blame her mother for her social seclusion? Does she have any rebellious goals or desires that she hides? Of course, none of this is surefire, and you don't have to use, they are merely examples I have made to help you understand what I mean.


History


Other than the already discussed areas of blending in the History and Personality, which I will not reiterate here, I don't really have much problem with your history. However, while I feel it is fine as it is, I suggest that you could think about, not changing it, but improving the way you express her past events. How did she react to being bullied? Any significant event caused by her mother's worrying? Both questions that are only present to incite curiosity. When you feel you are stuck, ask questions about your character about how they would react, how they have reacted, and how you feel they should, and why they would.


Skills


I have nothing really against your character's skills, and I actually enjoy how you added a natural weakness and sensitivity to strong odors that do not always smell so savory. Another thing I think really balances your character out is the lack of intensely dragon attributes. While I can understand them in characters with more relation to the creatures, I am glad you kept yours a bit "watered" down as they say for one that is only 25%, but still managed to make the powers and traits gained noticeable.


Overall


When I read this, I didn't ever have a part where I thought was unimprovable, each and every portion of it really having a ton of potential to do things. You did a very good job with the flow, and I think that you really put some heart into this. I liked the idea of the girl being a quarter dragon and I am glad you didn't noticeably slack off in doing the parts. Also, a little sidenote, I think you did a good job with describing the attire. All in all, I hope to see more Character Sheets from you, and I wish you the best of luck! Question, do you roleplay with this character often? Or have you only used her once?