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• Look Beyond
• The Superficial
• To Where There Is
• No Lie Left

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  Full name:
  
  
  Ellory May Prior
  
  
  Nickname(s) or Alias:
  
  
  Ellie or Moon
  
  
  Gender:
  
  
  Female
  
  
  Age:
  
  
  20
  
  
  Birthday:
  
  
  December 9th
  
  
  Sexuality:
  
  
  
  
  "Love is organic and has no gender biases"
  
  
  Nationality:
  
  
  English
  
  
  Religion:
  
  
  Agnostic
  
  
  City or town of birth:
  
  
  Ealing, London
  
  
  Relationship Status:
  
  
  Single
  
  
  Ellory is a pale young woman with fair, slightly melancholic features. Her skin is the texture of alabaster and although alabaster is a stone, one would be correct in thinking that Ellory is of fragile form. Her frame is petite and dainty and her long golden-blonde hair falls to just above waist length. Her fathomless eyes seem to be pensive and disconnected most of the time and are a bluish-grey hue. At a glance, her appearance is that of dreamy detachment, but one will find she has a warm and serene smile when engaging in conversation.
  
  
  Preferred style of clothing:
  
  
  Ellory has quite a keen eye for what is both fashionable and comfortable, despite being such a dreamy character. She has a love for classic looks and takes inspiration from women such as Audrey Hepburn, incorporating modern twists to the style.
  
  
  
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  Sometimes ignorance really is bliss Ellie Prior

  
  
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  Personality:
  
  
  Ellory fortunately (or unfortunately, whichever way you'd like to see it), has a heightened sense of self-awareness, and likes to use the title of a song from the musical South Pacific to describe the way she sees the world. The aforementioned song is 'A Cock-Eyed Optimist'. Ellory tries to see the world not as it is, but how it should be, which means she tends to neglect to see the flaws in others and prefers to help the positives shine through. She believes everyone can be redeemed and is proud of her overly-optimistic nature, despite knowing deep in her heart that nothing can be as idealistic as she would like.
  
  
  Ellory is an introvert, preferring her own company in order to recharge after a long day of socialising and many of her hobbies tend to be solo hobbies such as reading and arts and crafts. She is a perfectionist when it comes to her passions and although not usually a detail oriented person, she will have exacting standards when it comes to these things. This becomes especially difficult if her passion is directed into a specific person or persons, as most feel intimidated by standards they cannot uphold. This usually leads to friendships and romantic relationships simply fading away over time. That being said, Ellory holds friendships in high esteem and is loyal even when loyalty is truly not deserved.
  
  
  Ellie is a creative soul and has a tendency to want everything to be symbolic and meaningful. She is able to find symbolism in almost anything and is perceptive about the wants of other people, making her an effective socialiser and reluctantly popular. She is not one to enjoy the limelight much, preferring to celebrate the achievements of others.
  
  
  Likes:
  
  
  • Philosophising
    
  • Reading fantasies, biographies and self-help books
    
  • Winter time
    
  • Deep and meaningful conversations that get down to the raw essence of things
    
  • Observing people
    
  • Making people happy
    
  • Peace
    
  • Justice
    
  • House Parties
    
  • Children
    
  
  
  Dislikes:
  
  
  • Ignorance
    
  • Intolerance
    
  • People who force their world view as the only correct one
    
  • Heat
    
  • Inauthenticity
    
  • Rebels without a cause
    
  • Unnecessary violence
    
  • Hypocricy
    
  • Spiders and ants
    
  • Large crowds
    
  • Small talk
    
  
  
  Fears/phobias:
  
  
  Spiders and ants
  
  
  Favourite colour:
  
  
  Blue (any shade with the exception of navy)
  
  
  Hobbies:
  
  
  Reading
  
  
  Giving advice
  
  
  Surfing the web
  
  
  Dancing
  
  
  Medieval/Renaissance fairs
  
  
  Bowling with friends
  
  
  
  
  Binge watching Netflix with friends and family
  
  
  Driving aimlessly
  
  
  Taste in music:
  
  
  Ellie has eclectic taste in music, listening to anything from Jazz to Neo-soul to Punk Rock, to old school country music, but her very favourite artist is Alanis Morissette, with whom she feels deeply connected through her music.
  
  
  
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  Ellory May Prior was not born into a wealthy family, despite most people in school thinking she was "well posh". She is the second of two children and was born to Graham and Lou Prior, a solicitor and secondary(high school) school teacher, respectively. Her sister Anthea was born twelve years before Ellie and has not lived at home for many years. In Ellie's eyes, she is pretty much an only child, as she is not in contact with her sister.
  
  
  The family's lifestyle was decidedly middle-class, and their mindset conservative and though Ellie always loved her parents, she could not bring herself to align with their views of self-preservation over community service. Her father was slightly more sympathetic of her idealistic and creative sensibilities, but her mother had always been the more pragmatic of the two and tried to quash Ellie and her elder sibling's creative disposition, in favour of more practical and traditional career routes.
  
  
  Since Ellie was around the age of five, she had always been fascinated with and in awe of her uncle Ian (her father's brother) who was a freelance musician and somewhat of a kindred spirit. She would relish the times when she would be allowed to visit him and he was the person who always pushed for Ellie to be allowed an instrument of her choosing. On her seventh birthday, she received a hand-me-down guitar from her uncle and although her parents weren't fond of the gift, she was allowed to learn the instrument and has played ever since. Unfortunately, her Uncle Ian died of lung cancer when she was twelve, but she has dedicated several songs to his memory.
  
  
  As Ellie got older, her liberal social views began to clash greatly with her parents' views and she began to rebel in her own way by starting up her first band at the age of fifteen, knowing this was her parents' worst nightmare. The band (The Blood Moon) did well and she wrote a fair few well received songs with them, booking shows off their own backs and travelling to gigs with the help of her friends' more supportive parents.
  
  
  The band split up once secondary school was over, and to her mother's dismay, Ellie is still pursuing her music career even now that she has left home.
  
  
  
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  WIP
  
  
  

 

[HannaTheHippy]

- Screech -


SHE'S SO PRETTY OGMYOOSDOHFCVFDBESDV---


Ahem.


The character itself is amazing, and you do an amazing job of detailing your characters!


I've been wondering about the tabs that you've marked; Look beyond, the superficial, to where there is, etc.


How did you make those tabs? What are they called? I'm pondering the idea of incorporating them in my character sheets, but not sure on how to make them.


Like I said, the character and the detail is wonderful, and if you'd like to do a RP with me and this character, I'm free!

 

[PixieDust]

- Screech -
SHE'S SO PRETTY OGMYOOSDOHFCVFDBESDV---


Ahem.


The character itself is amazing, and you do an amazing job of detailing your characters!


I've been wondering about the tabs that you've marked; Look beyond, the superficial, to where there is, etc.


How did you make those tabs? What are they called? I'm pondering the idea of incorporating them in my character sheets, but not sure on how to make them.


Like I said, the character and the detail is wonderful, and if you'd like to do a RP with me and this character, I'm free!

Thank you for your lovely feedback. As for the tabs I simply used the 'tabs' bbcode and renamed the tabs to something she would think. And if you would like to RP with me I'm cool with that too

 

[Decius1988]

Thus character is well crafted. Love her!

 

[call me rae]

Right off the bat I'd say maybe try a darker blue for your text or a darker background. As it stands now I'm struggling to read the text as it kind of fades into the background