Autumn Wolfe's (probably bad) poetry

[AutumnWolfe]

So I decided to try to write some poetry. As I come up with new poems, I'll try to remember to add them on to this thread. Critiques are welcome.


Life is like that of the golden red bird


Changes making it more beautiful still


When Death's sad message is finally heard


Only Life can bring its hurt soul to heal


Death is a kidnapper, stealing sweet life


Just to return it to the hands of Earth


He plagues us with a terrifying strife


Then lays us out to dry on Life's warm hearth


But all lives must eventually end


And one day it might not restart its quest


Into the earth will all lives then descend


When all breath is stolen from Life's chest


But everyone will feel death one more time


When all memories are swept from the mind

 

[DemonKitten]

I think it is pretty decent actually. Nice flow and form to it. I believe it is a little too forced and some lines are better than others, but it is still a good poem. You are not bad and I hope you continue perfecting this skill.

 

[AutumnWolfe]

@DemonKitten thank you for the feedback. I wrote it for an English class and wanted to share it. Hopefully, I will get better.