Jak Reeve
Jak shuffled his feet slightly as everyone started to approach Vynne, He exhaled a silent short burst of air through his nose, he saw how many people where questioning Vynne, looking for answers the man might not have. Surprisingly the man in the wheelchair was quite succinct at...
Hey @Moonie
Could you possibaly make me a cover photo with the same theme as my profile picture aswell, It would be greatly appreciated you have already done alot for me but this would make my day.
The quest for Decays new profile picture
Good Morrow, Very talented people who I envy. I would like like to make a request if you could indulge me.
Could somebody draw me a new profile picture.
I have been using this profile picture for years now, and would like to change it up a bit. I was...
Jak Reeve
Jak watched on as the skeletal form slipped from his grasp and walked of, He could of attacked her with ease, and each second that past he wanted more and more to lash out, especially with all the snarky response she directed towards him, he let it go however when he saw her...
Jak Reeve
Jak heard the whisper "Don't move a muscle..." but it sounded more like a harsh rasp. Then a object pressed to the side of his frame, as the object met his body a slight hiss escaped and steam started to rise. Jak froze, not wanting to provoke his attacker. The hiss and steam made Jak...
Use her name more. also since you are talking from the point of view of one person, try to focus less on her specific actions and more on her reactions and observing the setting. Try starting sentences with words other than pronouns and avoid the common use of the old formula...
Jak Reeve
Jaks body spasms ceased, The flames died down. Steam was trailing of his body. Jak lay exhausted on the ivy and moss infested cobblestone pavement looking up at the big bright moon. His hair blended and weaved with the foliage. The burnt smell of vegetation wafted through the air...
@DemetrioMachete
I have edited Jak a bit, He is less lanky and more of an tall average build than being skinny, I have also added the trait that He thinks aggressively when he is confronted with problems. I've edited my backstory and writing promt a tiny bit to incorporate these things.
@DemetrioMachete
Ok thanks, I shall edit my characters reaction to edit out the Liches name, Would he know that the Lich was the Predikant? Also I will add something a bit more debilitating as a flaw for Jak. Thanks for the feedback
@KindlyPlagueDoctor
How dare you sir, I am most offended. I bet you cant even name the herbs that one puts in a mask to frighten away the plague. You probably think that the Plague is carried by some sort of Rat or something preposterous of that nature.